The department store (Contact details)
The department store
335-337 The parade
Beachtown
Auckland 1111
Ph:09 889 8899
Email: thedeapartmentstore@email.co.nz
Web: thedepartmentstore.co.nz
3 May 2016
Mr. Jack Simpson
52 Manchester street
Hornby 8042
Dear Mr. Simpson
Re: Experience in our store - 335-337 The parade, Auckland
Thank you for emailing us on the 3rd of May advising me of the problem that occurred while you were in our store. I am sorry that this behavior has happened while you were shopping in our store, there is no excuse for the lack of respect that was shown
The employee has been given a stern warning and has been given further customer service training.
We would like to apologize for the inconvenience by offering you a $50 voucher which can be used in any department of our store.
If there are any questions you would like us to answer please contact me by emailing or calling our department store.
I once again apologize for the inconvenience that was caused
Thanks,
Rebecca Smith
Manager - Footwear
The Department Store
Hi K-Ci,
ReplyDeleteYour language choice and tone in this letter are spot on.
In the letterhead, you do not need to write 'contact details'. Check your capitalisation throughout. The name of the business is The Department Store, so that is a proper noun. Also street names are proper nouns (including the word 'Street').
Check for full stops at the end of every sentence.
'Thanks' might be a good sign off for internal correspondence, but because this is a formal letter going out to a customer, something like 'Kind regards' might be more suitable.
Great use of paragraphs and spacing.
Ka rawe :)